tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12844162.post115557811648513632..comments2024-03-29T03:52:13.439-04:00Comments on __Chicks Dig Poetry__: Shackin' Up & Shippin' OutSandrahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02108785153248826337noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12844162.post-1156034900410119172006-08-19T20:48:00.000-04:002006-08-19T20:48:00.000-04:00Haha, I hate to admit I am also guilty of using th...Haha, I hate to admit I am also guilty of using that poetic device.Valerie Lovelandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11309299429765944601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12844162.post-1156034863731919352006-08-19T20:47:00.000-04:002006-08-19T20:47:00.000-04:00This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.Valerie Lovelandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11309299429765944601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12844162.post-1155997064377152762006-08-19T10:17:00.000-04:002006-08-19T10:17:00.000-04:00Thanks Valerie...not to break the fourth wall, the...Thanks Valerie...not to break the fourth wall, there's no better way to snag an ex boyfriend's attention than to quote him in your poem. = )Sandrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02108785153248826337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12844162.post-1155792312254139992006-08-17T01:25:00.000-04:002006-08-17T01:25:00.000-04:00I'm really liking your Allergy Girl poems at No Te...I'm really liking your Allergy Girl poems at No Tell--especially I and VIII.Valerie Lovelandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11309299429765944601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12844162.post-1155647608032314132006-08-15T09:13:00.000-04:002006-08-15T09:13:00.000-04:00Thanks for the good feedback on Allergy Girl...rig...Thanks for the good feedback on Allergy Girl...right now these poems are anchoring the first section of my book MS. I'm on the fence as to whether to move forward with a revision de-emphasizing childhood narrative. So it's good for me to be reminded that these do have craft and value. = )Sandrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02108785153248826337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12844162.post-1155601188476871642006-08-14T20:19:00.000-04:002006-08-14T20:19:00.000-04:00I enjoyed your poem at NTM. Wonderful music in th...I enjoyed your poem at <I>NTM</I>. Wonderful music in this: “working the mechanical claw right, left, right, back, / aiming for the stuffed bear, missing. A clutch // of cheesecake.” The leap from stanza two to three is just right, and prepares the reader for the force of the “wrecking ball” at the end. Especially liked “bleary silence in white rooms”. <BR/><BR/>And thanks for pointing the direction to Silliman's take on Smith's work. I'll have to read her book.sam of the ten thousand thingshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04378206265831223396noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12844162.post-1155583093405728782006-08-14T15:18:00.000-04:002006-08-14T15:18:00.000-04:00I really enjoyed the Allergy Girl poem, especially...I really enjoyed the Allergy Girl poem, especially the bits about the marriage's "bleary silence in white rooms" and the wrecking ball. I think maybe I could use some of the techniques you use in this poem for my autobiographical works (merging of surreal and confessional).Donhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13556663035451699295noreply@blogger.com